Your homepage may not have a lot of text on it. Perhaps, like some of the site examples in the last unit, it only contains your tagline and your elevator speech. But your other site pages may have a page or two full of text.
So how can you present all your information, without losing your reader’s attention? And how do you snag people in to get them to start reading and then keep reading?
There are a few techniques you can use to present your words in a way that attract and hold attention. First, let’s look at the way your words appear on the page.
On the Internet, there are readers (who actually read, in order, what you’ve written) and scanners (skim-readers), so you want to write for both. You can do this by either:
- Highlighting key pieces of your text to jump out at the skim-readers.
- Or you can use sub-headings to break up your copy, yet still convey the gist or idea of what you’re saying.
- Or you can use the sub-headings as a hook to pull them in and make them read more.
Let’s look at each technique.
Highlight Text To Pull Attention
You can test whether you’ve highlighted the right parts of your text, by ONLY reading the highlighted text and see if you’ve pretty much got your message conveyed. And I’m going to give you a real life example of this soon.
You can highlight using bold, or a different color text, or an actual background highlight. Use the highlight that fits with the style of your site. Note: Yes, you could also use italics, but you would need to use them sparingly as italics can be more difficult and tedious to read – depending on the font you have chosen.
You also want to break your text up into smaller paragraphs, as it’s hard to read a big chunk of text online. But, it is also hard to keep your focus if every paragraph is only one sentence long! So good copy has a mix of both longer and shorter paragraphs.
If you don’t like highlighted text, another way to grab your site visitor’s attention quickly, is to use sub-headings throughout your text.
Sub-Headings Hook The Reader and Summarize Text
The eye will immediately flick to the sub-headings and if they are intriguing, or descriptive in a way that makes the person feel you are talking to them, or funny, or pithy, the site visitor will start reading your text and you have a good chance of hooking them in.
I’m going to demonstrate the power and effect of each of these techniques by giving you an actual example from a live site, so you can learn and also compare.

Take a look at this sample text from Simply Gratitude.
First we have the Rough Version where she has effectively nailed down her content; she has identified her customer, she knows what her business is and what it does, and she is speaking directly to her customer.
But it is still not ready to go live, as it needs this last, final polish that will really engage her site visitor. Read it and think about how you’d give it the final edit to adhere to the two final polishing criteria:
- Highlight text for the skim readers. Or use sub-headings.
- Vary length of paragraphs and avoid overly large chunks of text
ROUGH VERSION – Simply Gratitude, Corporate Gift Service
Can you remember a time where you were gobsmacked by an unexpected gift?
Take a minute to recall…I’ll give you a moment to reflect.
There are many corporate gift specialists out there and I’m one of them, but what makes Simply Gratitude different is our focus. We work with you to create custom, high-end extraordinary gifts and bring attention to you as a business and use gratitude and thankfulness as the vehicle. It’s one thing to thank a client for contributing to your business by giving them a percentage off the next purchase or adding a dollar amount into their account for referrals. It’s another thing to send them a gift because you believe that they are valuable and want to express that gratitude and thankfulness through the power of a gift.
So let’s go back to the gift you recalled. I’ll bet you can remember the gift down to the details and maybe even who you were with or what was cooking! You may have been 5 years old or a teenager or maybe you never received a gift that had this sort of impact that I’m speaking of. Either way, you have a chance to engage someone in this experience and pay forward the long lasting memories and power that an unexpected gift brings.
Most of us can’t recall what we were given 2 years ago, but an unexpected gift has the power to last for years. Just think about that for a second, you giving to a client/customer can have the power of them remembering you for years!
Simply Gratitude helps gifts become an extension of you and of your business. I ask you to give gratitude, to pay it forward and say thank you just because and do it without expectation because trust me the universe will take care of the rest!
If you as a business say that you value your clients, appreciate them and that you are an extraordinary company then let Simply Gratitude take you further into your commitment of being extraordinary!
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Now let’s look at Example #1 to see how I have edited this homepage text to incorporate these two of the final criteria:
- Highlight text for the skim readers.
- Vary length of paragraphs and avoid overly large chunks of text
EXAMPLE #1 – Use Highlighted Text
Can you remember a time where you were gobsmacked by an unexpected gift?
Take a minute to recall… I’ll give you a moment to reflect.
There are many corporate gift specialists out there and I’m one of them, but what makes Simply Gratitude different is our focus.
We work with you to create custom, high-end, extraordinary gifts and bring attention to you as a business – using gratitude and thankfulness as the vehicle.
It’s one thing to thank a client for contributing to your business by giving them a percentage off their next purchase, or adding a dollar amount into their account for referrals. It’s another thing to send them a gift because you believe that they are valuable and want to express that gratitude and thankfulness through the power of a gift.
So let’s go back to the gift you recalled. I’ll bet you can remember that gift down to the details, and maybe even who you were with, or what was cooking! You may have been 5 years old, or a teenager… or maybe you never received a gift that had this sort of impact that I’m speaking of. Either way, you have a chance to engage someone in this experience and pay forward the long-lasting memories and power that an unexpected gift brings.
Most of us can’t recall what we were given for Christmas or a birthday 2 years ago, but an unexpected gift has the power to last for years. Just think about that for a second: Giving to a client/customer (in the true spirit of gratefulness) can have the power of them remembering you for years!
Simply Gratitude helps gifts become an extension of you and of your business. I ask you to give gratitude, to pay it forward and say thank you ‘just because’ and do it without expectation, because, trust me, the universe will take care of the rest!
If you as a business say that you value your clients, appreciate them and that you are an extraordinary company then let Simply Gratitude take you further into your commitment of being extraordinary!
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Remember our trick for testing whether your highlighting works? You read ONLY the highlighted text and see if it alone conveys your message. So take a moment to scan through Example #1 above and read only the highlighted text. See how that works? Pretty cool, eh?
Make sure you always apply this same test to your own highlighted copy.
Of course, it is always your choice how much highlighting you use and what kind of customer you want to attract. You may say, “I don’t want any customers who are scanners, my customer is someone who carefully reads text and doesn’t rush through things – that’s the kind of person I want to attract.”
Or perhaps you yourself do not like highlighted text!
That’s fine and perhaps for that kind of customer, or for your own esthetic sense, you want to use headlines and sub-headings instead of highlighting text. In that case, you would format your text more like this:
EXAMPLE #2 – Use Sub-Headings
Can you remember a time where you were gobsmacked by an unexpected gift?
Take a minute to recall… I’ll give you a moment to reflect.
There are many corporate gift specialists out there and I’m one of them, but what makes Simply Gratitude different is our focus.
The Power of Thankfulness
We work with you to create custom, high-end, extraordinary gifts and bring attention to you as a business – using gratitude and thankfulness as the vehicle.
It’s one thing to thank a client for contributing to your business by giving them a percentage off their next purchase, or adding a dollar amount into their account for referrals. It’s another thing to send them a gift because you believe that they are valuable and want to express that gratitude and thankfulness through the power of a gift.
Pay It Forward
So let’s go back to the gift you recalled. I’ll bet you can remember that gift down to the details, and maybe even who you were with, or what was cooking! You may have been 5 years old, or a teenager… or maybe you never received a gift that had this sort of impact that I’m speaking of. Either way, you have a chance to engage someone in this experience and pay forward the long-lasting memories and power that an unexpected gift brings.
Most of us can’t recall what we were given for Christmas or a birthday 2 years ago, but an unexpected gift has the power to last for years. Just think about that for a second: Giving to a client/customer (in the true spirit of gratefulness) can have the power of them remembering you for years!
Be Extraordinary
Simply Gratitude helps gifts become an extension of you and of your business. I ask you to give gratitude, to pay it forward and say thank you ‘just because’ and do it without expectation, because, trust me, the universe will take care of the rest!
If you as a business say that you value your clients, appreciate them and that you are an extraordinary company then let Simply Gratitude take you further into your commitment of being extraordinary!
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Again, using the same scan test you used with the highlighted text in Example #1, you can see that these sub-headings – although not as effective or comprehensive as highlighted text – still manage to convey the broad strokes of the message. And hopefully they are intriguing, or eye-catching enough to make the reader want to read more.
Use whichever style of emphasis you prefer. It is easier to figure out which text to highlight, or how to divide up your text and give it sub-heads if you let your copy sit for a few days, then you can look at it again with fresh eyes.
Alternatively, you can give it to a friend or family member and see what they come up with – never underestimate the value of fresh eyes!
You may have noticed that throughout this Listen To Your Freedom program, I have used both sub-headings and highlighted text (in bold). When you have a full page or more of copy, you can certainly use both techniques without it being overkill.
Remember, your goal is to make reading, understanding and implementing easier for the reader – so just make sure whatever you do achieves that goal.
Attention-Grabbing Headlines
If writing doesn’t come naturally to you, how do you come up with a call-to-action that makes people actually take the action you want (sign-up, or click the link, etc.).
How do you write a blog post title that makes someone want to click on it and read more? How do you title your YouTube video to make it stand out among all the others? And how do you craft a headline for your opt-in offer that makes people want to sign up immediately?
Well, you set yourself to some swiping, that’s how! You copy or borrow techniques from proven copywriters and then just tailor them to your content. Here are some easy ways to come up with attention-pulling headlines or titles that are proven (in multiple split-tests) to produce good response from viewers.
Most copywriting courses train you to use what they call Power Words. These are words that are active, wow language, bold, audacious words or claims that pack a punch. The reasoning is that these words jump out and grab the reader.
But personally, I think copy and headlines like this are a turn-off, as they make me think the person is a scammer or a knucklehead:
Slam Your Ideas Home With This Incredible Opportunity To Annihilate Your Rivals
Power copywriting like that just doesn’t appeal to me. But I think there are markets where it would be appealing – like bodybuilding, wrestling, or extreme sports, for example.
Jini’s Copywriting Tips & Tricks
For the rest of us, we should just try to use words that carry a bit more energy or sparkle than regular words, like these:

- Effortless
- Painstaking
- Fun
- Free
- Incredible
- Essential
- Absolute
- Strange
- Sparkling
- Strident
- Audacious
- Fantastic
- Bizarre
- Magnificent
- Luscious
- Fabulous
- Crazy
- Striking
- Powerful
etc.
You can then take these words, or any other adjective, and combine one or two of these words with any of the techniques below:
Use a number in your headline:
5 Fun Ways To …
The 10 Top…
7 Crazy Reasons…
3 Great Ideas To…
8 Secrets Of…
Give a list – people love lists!
The Top Reasons…
Octogenarians Share Their Top Life Lessons…
Spring Decorating Ideas…
Combine techniques: Of course, these two techniques – numbers and lists – also combine well together. Simply put a number with any of these words to form your headline:
- Tricks
- Lessons
- Ideas
- Ways
- Items
- Principles
- Facts
- Reasons
- Secrets
Examples:
10 Tricks To Beat Winter’s…
21 Ways to…
7 Secrets of…
The Secret to Getting (Making/Planning/Having/Avoiding)…
Ask a question: these trigger people to think about the question and answer it in their head, then they want to find out the ‘real’ answer.
What are…?
How can…?
What does…?
When is…?
Who is/are…?
Where is..?
Where can…?
Where do…?
Find out why…
Use the fear factor: People are always interested in how to avoid mistakes or disaster.
Top 10 mistakes…
5 Things You Never Want To Do When…
How To Avoid…
How to Never…
Make Sure You Don’t Get…
Compare items: People love comparisons, especially when they’re doing research.
X versus Y…
See Which Car Rules – X or Y?
Battle of Titans – X vs Y
Which One Scored Higher – X or Y?
Survey Ranks X Above Y
Use a trigger word: these are used to encourage, persuade or enable someone
How to…
Why…
When…
What…
I have to admit, my favorite headline or titling technique is “How To… ” perhaps because I do a lot of teaching.
Headline Formula
You can also use whichever techniques or words given above that appeal to you and combine them using this formula:
Number + Adjective + Keyword or Subject + Promise
Examples:
10 (Number)
+ Audacious (Adjective)
+ Ways to Decorate Your Party (Subject)
+ In Less Than One Hour (Promise)
= 10 Audacious Ways to Decorate Your Party In Less Than One Hour
7 Effortless Ways To Sell Your Car in One Week
3 Bizarre Ways You Can Double Your Revenue By Spending Less
Okay, that should give you some good ideas whenever you’re stumped.
Pressie Time!
Woohoo! Time for another gift! While we’re at it, let’s take a moment to offer gratitude for this amazing journey we are on together. Isn’t this awesome? Aren’t you learning SO much? Are you excited about your future? I am!
So I turned these Copywriting Tips & Tricks into a well cool PDF you can download and then pin near your computer for easy brainstorming whenever you need to think up a title for a blog post, a heading or sub-heading, the name of a new product or program, a title for your latest video, etc. Enjoy!
DOWNLOAD Jini’s Copywriting Tips & Tricks

Now that I’ve given you all the how-to and lots and lots of examples, it’s your turn to get your pen and paper and turn all this new knowledge into some fantastic stuff for your website!
Use Jini’s Copywriting Tips & Tricks (did you download it and print it out?) to come up with some blog post titles that your people would nd eye-catching or interesting (do at least 5):
Now take the copy you came up with for your ABOUT page and use Jini’s Copywriting Tips & Tricks to add sub-headings before each section. Maybe you also want to add a headline at the very top? You can either work in Microsoft Word, print it out and glue it here, or work right on the page here:
And lastly, now that you have all this great website copy written, how do you choose a font (style of lettering) for your site text, headings, etc? Here’s a nifty infographic that will help you decide:








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